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Nicholas' poem
Posted: Nov 16, 2017 by: Year Five (Year5) on: Year 5
Penguins,slide on their bellies slip like jelly.They waddle across the icy floor.Flapping there wings up and down to show signs of danger or to hunt for food.Bobbling and bouncing on the floor,Sliding and up and down hills on there bellies into the sea jumping on ice bergs.
Penguins, Penguins all around and they are up and down they can be anywhere they might give you a scare!
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Year F.
Nov 23, 2017
Good work but maybe you make it longer and add a simile. |
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Year F.
Nov 23, 2017
Good work but maybe you make it longer and add a simile. |
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Ivan V.
Nov 23, 2017
that was nor only good that was perfect well done nichloas |
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Year F.
Nov 16, 2017
Good :) |